I am impressed with the Quality of these study models. In contrast to your daigrams, these are the work of a budding Architect. Complementing the content, the photography and presentation are very well executed, providing the most coherent post you have had to date.
The Impression series starts off strong. The burned metal encapsulates the description quite well. I like the thought behind the second model as well. The execution is not as clear, however. Perhaps the cyclical nature wants to be explored with one medium. Think more about sailor's braiding techniques wherein they take a thick rope down to a single strand. The wire and rope, to me at least, is more of an introduction of "other" rather than indicative of a cycle. This metaphor is more applicable later in your History series. The third model with the matchsticks is a bit predictable and trite...perhaps a bit too literal.
The Program series is equally strong. The first model, though literal, is strong enough in its meaning that the description is superfluous (in a good way). I like the second with the paper, both in its meaning as well as the form it takes. I might suggest looking at torn edges on the paper to better support your argument, though. It could be said the the third model is too derivative of the second. The forms, although out of a different material, are similar as too is the interpretation if one does not look at the words.
Of your history series, the first model is clear, concise and superbly constructed. The second is possibly the best of the series. Take a look at expanding the palette of the "new." The argument could be made that adding variety to the materiality will be a starker contrast to the monolith of the decaying "now." Although I get the intention behind the third model, it will read as a book with some thread through it. Find a way to abstract the idea into Form rather than direct representation.
With this start, there is an abundance of content, both verbal and material as well as form and intent. Keep the momentum going. Push these into a larger study, synthesized of multiple ideas in one gesture. Do not lose the formal and spatial qualities that these little study models are already evoking. Push toward a Parti. I look forward to seeing it.
I am impressed with the Quality of these study models. In contrast to your daigrams, these are the work of a budding Architect. Complementing the content, the photography and presentation are very well executed, providing the most coherent post you have had to date.
ReplyDeleteThe Impression series starts off strong. The burned metal encapsulates the description quite well. I like the thought behind the second model as well. The execution is not as clear, however. Perhaps the cyclical nature wants to be explored with one medium. Think more about sailor's braiding techniques wherein they take a thick rope down to a single strand. The wire and rope, to me at least, is more of an introduction of "other" rather than indicative of a cycle. This metaphor is more applicable later in your History series. The third model with the matchsticks is a bit predictable and trite...perhaps a bit too literal.
The Program series is equally strong. The first model, though literal, is strong enough in its meaning that the description is superfluous (in a good way). I like the second with the paper, both in its meaning as well as the form it takes. I might suggest looking at torn edges on the paper to better support your argument, though. It could be said the the third model is too derivative of the second. The forms, although out of a different material, are similar as too is the interpretation if one does not look at the words.
Of your history series, the first model is clear, concise and superbly constructed. The second is possibly the best of the series. Take a look at expanding the palette of the "new." The argument could be made that adding variety to the materiality will be a starker contrast to the monolith of the decaying "now." Although I get the intention behind the third model, it will read as a book with some thread through it. Find a way to abstract the idea into Form rather than direct representation.
With this start, there is an abundance of content, both verbal and material as well as form and intent. Keep the momentum going. Push these into a larger study, synthesized of multiple ideas in one gesture. Do not lose the formal and spatial qualities that these little study models are already evoking. Push toward a Parti. I look forward to seeing it.